~~drabble.

[reenka]

this didn't take long. well, i'd -hope- so, since it's exactly 100 words. (yeay me!)

it's v. v. hard for me to write short stuff that's self-contained. i mean, i can write short, it's just not going to have a middle or an end. so i'm kind of happy with myself, here. i edited and whittled it down, so here it goes.

break up (and get them back together) challenge 100-word drabble for veela~:)



disclaimer: not mine.
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~simplicity~

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He knew all about the simplicity of the inevitable. He wasn't desperate
anymore. One of them would have resented the other eventually, if either
had given in.

They were always walking away, unable to share the same space without
drawing borders, fighting for territory.

They were always separate, together or apart.

There wasn't much of anything either of them could do about what they
needed.

Space.

It didn't mean what it used to. It couldn't.

Once again, he'd left his broomstick where it lay, his clothes neatly
folded, his namesake hanging around Harry's neck.

The inevitability of borders aside, so was their crossing.
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Comments

[moriavis.livejournal.com]

YES! Something I can respond to without sounding all un-meta'y and brain-dead! *grins* Although my reviews aren't much better. But anyway, I love drabbles-- they force people to crystalize what they want to portray as minimal as possible, and I think you did a great job. The presence of borders themselves echo very loudly to me of H/D and I loved the whole crossing bit. So, yeah. You really should write more. ^^

[yourpoison.livejournal.com]

*laughs* thanks ^.^
i'm glad it wasn't too philosophical all by itself. (looking back on it, i think it could be taken as rather...er... abstract).
i do write a lot. i really really do.
i just don't -finish- a lot.
it helps to have boundaries (like, a plot outline as in a challenge -plus- a word limit really does help). most challenges are sort of open-ended so it doesn't really help much besides initial inspiration, but having such a tight space to work within makes it either impossible to come up with -anything- or pretty easy ^^

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[moriavis.livejournal.com]

Well, then you should -finish- what you write. ^^

Yes, it could be taken rather abstract, but the more solid images, such as the broomstick and the folded clothing, help ground it alot.

My writing works better with open-ended challenges myself, so anyone who can work within specific boundaries always earns my admiration.

[veuki.livejournal.com]

Again, it's all about simplicty. This was lovely, Reena. *smiles* The whole... just... in your face bluntness just struck me. I really adored this. *wants moremoremore of your work*

[yourpoison.livejournal.com]

*grins*
not to worry, most stuff i write has moremoremore words by a cart-ful :D
oh yah, verbose am i. surprised at my own conciseness, verily >:D<

am working on several. short pieces, naturally easier~:)
but, thankees ^^

[addictedkitten.livejournal.com]

Sweeeet. I love the spareness of it, especially that last line. Is pretty!

[yourpoison.livejournal.com]

bweeeeeee :D
*bounces*
*feels reassured of worth*
hee :D

though really, i guess it could be taken as depressing ><;;

[toscas-kiss.livejournal.com]

Lovely! You manage to fit so much into so few words.

[yourpoison.livejournal.com]

danke :D
'tis unusual for me, so i'm glad it worked without confusing the hell out of people (mostly) :D

[blythely.livejournal.com]

The last line. Oh!
::is jealous::
I'm very much in awe of this. You've fit so much into so little.
Call me stupid though (many do), but: his namesake hanging around Harry's neck is this literal or figurative? Am I missing something?

[yourpoison.livejournal.com]

hmm. yah, i was wondering if that would confuse anyone, but you know, 100 words, had to tighten belt, and so on. i would've said he left his -ring- around harry's neck, but that's, you know, shades of ip. there are so many fics where draco gives harry a silver dragon (or vice versa), it' s not even funny. usually it's a pendant. so, you know~:)

draco, dragon, it's all the same >:D<

*shrugs* i really didn't think anyone would go, "oh, so he left a -live- dragon around harry's neck, i seeeeee". ahem :D
but thanks ^___^

[blythely.livejournal.com]

oh, so he left a -live- dragon around harry's neck, i seeeeee
Heh. Nah, wasn't thinking that. Was thinking [insert jewelry here] = literal, and fire-breathing snappy traces of draco-ness = figurative.

I think I'm getting a bit too meta today. Will go lie down.

[yourpoison.livejournal.com]

fire-breathing snappy traces of draco-ness
*cracks up*
wow. it never ceases to amaze me, the sorts of things the same sentence could be taken as >:D<

i guess i -was- being uber-abstract (sort of) for the rest of it, but that one bit was meant to ground it. ahaha. i love that. fire-breathing snappy traces :D
*giggles*
i can't even wrap my mind around around it, but. yah. he was being strangled by luuuurve :D

[vignette00.livejournal.com]

*small meek voice*

see... I really did think he had put a live dragon around harry's neck. Not so like that, but had tried to... I don't know... kill him out of frustration?

yeah, yeah. I'm morbid.

But I adore that little drabble.

[yourpoison.livejournal.com]

*snortlaughs*
oh, what's a love story without a homicidal dragon >:D<
*ponders* i can see the possibilities. *laughs* draco gets tired of having himself of crabbe/goyle do the "dirty work" so he charms this tiny dragon to go on this mission of no mercy, to kill harry (and thus no evidence).
but the dragon luuuuurves harry on first sight :D ahahahah *bounces*
draco is very pissed because that's -his- dragon, and how dare it like harry? he tries to peel it off harry after giving him some sort of sleeping potion to knock him out, but the dragon growls and huffs fireballs at draco, biting at draco's finger.

so really, the dragon is pissed at -draco-, because everyone -knows- both draco & dragon want haawwwyyy :D

hee! oh. i'm incorrigible :D

and eeeeeee~! you...read! and liked! fic! yeay :D